Carpe Diem Haiku Kai

Carpe Diem Tanka Splendor #13 Teika’s Fifth Tanka Writing Technique “Lofty Style” (full moon)

One of the traditional examples of this style is the poem by Fujiwara Yoshitsune (1169-1206) composed on the given theme of “the moon at dawn” in the Shinkokinshū #16:1545:

ana no to o / oshiakegata no / kumonma yori / kamiyo no tsuki / kage zo nokoreru

the coming dawn
pushes open the Gates of Heaven
from the clouds
the moon from the Age of Gods
is an image left behind

Here is my attempt:

moonlit eve falls now
stars begin their cosmic dance
constellations bright
your eyes dark  as pools of night
open up to reveal time

 

img courtesy of Cronus

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