Fireblossom Friday at Real Toads, with a prompt to look beyond the obvious.
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She stands before me
as so many times before she has done
and my heart it weeps
if I could describe her to you I would
but i fear cliche
i do not dare drape words on her perfect form
add anything other
to her
being just her
Would i hang a new flower on the ripening cherry blossom?
Drip an extra drop of water into the tumbling waters falling?
Pour new grains of sand onto the curve of paradise?
no
all i can do is to reach out and touch her
and then describe with all my senses alight
that sound of my soul
that seeing of the naked night
that touch of electric ripple
that taste of nectar
that smell of skin
one-ness
that belonging
alas
my spirit fingers make no contact
and she
this light breeze ignores
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Nice twist and tender poem. Thanks for being part of FBF!
–coal (Fireblossom in WP clothes.)
Thanks. Enjoyed the prompt.
Well done, Paul! And very erotic…
Thanks Bekkie
Oh, this is VERY Cool! Way to rock the prompt.
Thanks Sherry.
Oh the pain of reaching for what you can never touch. Very evocative piece.
Thanks Rommy. I hadn’t thought so much of the pain aspect as I was really looking to create a surprise with the unveiling as it were, but now that you mention it I agree. Especially having know that touch.
Quite haunting!
Ha ha…Haunting 😉 I see what you did there.
Nice twist.. love “Would i hang a new flower on the ripening cherry blossom?”
I always remember a line from a film where a Zen monk is studying the cherry blossoms to determine which one is perfect..he comes to a conclusion with his dying breath, that of course, they all are.
Aaahhh…. I wanted to hold on to all those images even as I felt them slipping away.
Thanks Kerry. Great comment.
Thanks for the sail into a dream space–you had me seeing everything from our poor Statue of Liberty, to a long lost passion that wears a woman’s face in dreams. A lovely flow to this.
The veil arrives right at the lysis and through it we perceive where longing fits amid the real. Nice job, Paul.
Thanks Brendan.
Cool twist, Paul!