fly

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Image by Karin Gustafson.

 

these flights of fant(a)sy

serve only to (re)mind me

of how (wei)ghted i really am

of how deep runs this (wo)und

(wou)nd around my c(ore)

tugging at me whenever i lift off

an(chor)ing me always

to a point below gr(ou)nd level

my own personal ab(yss)

but this groun(d)ed knowing

comes only upon landin(g)

and staying put a (whi)le

and so perhaps i must fly

until (i fa)ll

and as i fall with (no grou)nd below

(i m)ust it seems

fly still

 

 

 

20 thoughts on “fly

  1. Kerry says:

    Falling is a kind of flying.. until one hits the ground. This was a very interesting read, especially with your use of parehteses.

      • Plum says:

        I’m certain.

        The parens lead me to underground stories/messages.

        Like at the end, I see “I’m used.” Who doesn’t feel like THAT?! then there’s that gorgeous closing call to action: “fly still” … like a hummingbird. If I were a bird, that’s what I’d be … But I’d be able to turn into a snow owl at will. 🙂

      • Plum says:

        I love how one version of the opening says “these flights of fancy serve to mind me.” I mean, good golly. If you’re gonna go to the trouble of imagining, or fantasizing, it sure better all be to your liking! It’s for YOUR pleasure, after all. 😛

      • Plum says:

        I also see “how we-Ted I am.” This makes me think of Ted Hughes and Sylvia Plath … how hard it would be to be married to her (to him too, I’m sure).

        Then it could also be “whee! Ted,” which makes me think of him being on a merry go round, which makes me think of his affairs. One person’s fun is too often another’s pain, and even sickness.

      • Plum says:

        Even the title; rearrange the letters to find hidden words: … life, lift (without the t), leaf, feel, file, flee.

  2. ManicDdaily says:

    HI Paul–the parantheses work in an interesting way. A first I thought they were a bit of a distraction, but as I read on, I could understand the kind of interruption that they made worked very well with this sense of tentative halt and stop start, and moments within a flight or fall where one is unsure of what’s next–so they created a very unique and interesting rhythm. Thanks so much for participating. k.

  3. wildchild47 says:

    I think the use of the parentheses works wonders in this piece – it really adds something the perfect dimension to the piece – even as others mentioned, initially I was a bit put off, but realized how clever this is – and it works, because it emphasizes the words, really brings it all home, home the start – stop motion is part of flight.

    And I just love sitting with the words and lines themselves – letting them linger – in relation to how you’ve captured a universal theme, made it somewhat personal without being too revealing, and yet, we can extract and make it wholly intimate in relation to ourselves. Truly wonderful.

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