plucked blossom

Poem for submission to Real Toads Flash 55 Challenge! and for Poetry Pantry at Poets United.

 

tender pink blossom

vulnerable pure and unpicked

mirrors dress not form

i am undone

 

red cherry fallen

washing away innocence

unfolding in rain’s rivulet

i am undone

 

no solace in the water

only a memory

for tomorrow’s regret

i am undone

 

lotus petals unfurled

soft Heart of the Sutra

i point toes

i am undone

 

13 responses to “plucked blossom

  1. A very Oriental feel, in form and phrase, enhances this human story that is as frail and evocative as the scent of a flower. I especially like the chorus, and the line ‘..only a memory/for tomorrow’s regret…’

  2. red cherry fallen
    washing away innocence
    unfolding in rain’s rivulet

    It certainly tells us of the corresponding revelation that the innocence in youth is no more when allowed the freedom of choice!

    Hank

  3. I like the subtle shifts of meaning, the repeating line and the reference to the heart of the sutra.. the illustration is almost to perfectly modest to be entirely as it seems.

  4. Hi Paul, I’ve come here from your link you posted in the comment section of Sunday’s Poetry Pantry @ Poets United.
    A beautiful poem & a wonder of wonder to find lotus sutra here!

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