echo breath's shimmering twist-breeze
spilling
giggling
ghosts
bubbling
from
a
jar
storms dawn's dance
cueing flicker sounds
spilling rose dreams
drizzling fear-grinned curls
scar-sparking cloud-opening
melted still lull
leaving whispered shadows
bliss-free
journey-skipping spring
balloons to greener bright hues
painting pepper-spiced streams of consciousness
submission for dVerse Quadrille #41. Feel free to join us and submit one of your own.
“painting pepper-spiced streams of consciousness”
Wow. I love that!
Excellent poem.
Bravo!!! Especially LOVE that last line! 🙂
This whole poem is a stream of poetic consciousness and outstanding writer. 🙂
Giggling ghosts bubbling from a jar…delightful!!
Is this ALL the words again? Amazing. I adore how you space out the piece, making it appear larger & more significant.
Love the format of this… and the title is also great and add to the whole poem. I have given up on all the words for now,
This is so different from Lillian’s. I love your journey-skipping spring – must be friends with the little lame balloon man…
spilling rose dreams
drizzling fear-grinned curls…superb. Well done.
Thanks. These are always fun.
Pepper-spiced streams of consciousness – I’d like that on a plaque in my kitchen. Wow!
Plaques made up to special order 😉
+ 1 on the ‘bubbling from a jar’ – made richer by the clever arrangement on the page.
Bravo! Oh how I love “pepper-spiced”, so simple but delicious in sound and to describe “streams of consiousness”…wow. The image of ghosts bubbling from jars reminded me of Lillian’s echoing jars. Nice!
I love this stanza:
spilling rose dreams
drizzling fear-grinned curls
scar-sparking cloud-opening
melted still lull
What a giddy flow of lyrical beauty!
Another gem, Paul! My favorite part is:
‘painting pepper-spiced streams of consciousness’ – very clever.
Pepper spiced, gear-grinned, scar-sparking, very Octoberish in a foolish way! Using so many of the given words is not easy, I’m sure.
Using all of them 😉
You and Lill are definitely giving De and Bjorn a run for their money, Paul! I love those ‘spilling
giggling ghosts bubbling from a jar’, the ‘flicker sounds’ and ‘drizzling fear-grinned curls’. I’d love to see an animated film based on this!
I thonk Bjorn is out now. I love all the words. So much fun.
Yes, very Halloweenish, yet light and fun with the images evoked.
I just read Lillian’s and I had to align my brain. Bring new here I am trying to figure you poets out, but more likely, easing my way into this genre I wonder if poetry is to be figured out. Perhaps that is the draw. I love all of this!
Trying to work in the 40-some words that we have been given over almost 2 years tends to be obscure. Most often those of us who try this “using all the words” challenge write very accessible poetry. I find that, when I read them, I look for fun phrases rather then worry too much about the meaning. On the other hand, there are some who love to try “experimental” poetry. Just have fun! And welcome to dVerse.
You are going to make it to 44, Paul. I especially enjoyed this image:
spring
balloons to greener bright hues
I love the “pepper-spiced streams!”