falling leaves

Tonight I am hosting MTB at dVerse and the focus of our attention is the ghazal.

The ghazal is a traditional Arabian verse form with the first two lines ending in the same refrain, which is then repeated at the end of each stanza. It consists of at least five, but often up to fifteeen, two-line stanzas.

Each stanza should be independent, but should tie together with the whole. (Like a pearl on a necklace)

The first two lines end with the same refrain. This refrain is repeated at the end of each stanza.

The final stanza is a signature, where the author can use his/her name to seal the poem.

The lines should be of similar length and rhythm. Themes are traditionally melancholy, introspective, loving, longing and thoughtful and in the Sufi tradition of Hafiz, directed to the Beloved (God)

Here is my ghazal.

Please feel free to visit dVerse to read some of the fabulous work there and maybe add a poem of your own.

 

 

here in this moment I stand, falling leaves might break me

for wearing my soul as a skin, falling leaves might break me

 

life has fashioned a hole right where my heart used to reside

and I ask quietly of my self, will falling leaves really break me

 

that space, now brim full and spilling all joy and remorse throughout

offers balanced equal measures, such that falling leaves could break me

 

winged heart in total free fall, longing for your touch my dear Beloved

knowing that even your breath caresses like falling leaves that now break me

 

this scribbler is no more, surrendered to all things, to your deep ocean of being

and in doing so, becoming one with the falling leaves that have always broke me

26 thoughts on “falling leaves

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:

    I loved the way it works, with those falling leaves, I sense the passing of time and the final line in joining with the leaves… the beloved here could means so much, divine, a person or nature itself… thank your for a great prompt.

  2. Gospel Isosceles says:

    This has so much devotion in it, reading almost like a psalm, but really just paying tribute to the original form. I was unfamiliar with the ghazal and afraid I missed the refrain part while trying my own, but I appreciate yours in how it’s meant to be written and think Hafiz would be pleased too.

    • paul scribbles says:

      No worries re the form. There appear to be differing ghazals out there but this was where I wanted to go for my own practice. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I am in a heart opening moment in my life and so it felt like the perfect form.

  3. kim881 says:

    I love the repetition of ‘falling leaves might break me’, it lends a sense of fragility and the leaves remind me of autumn, and the link between the lines:
    ‘life has fashioned a hole right where my heart used to reside’
    and
    ‘that space, now brim full and spilling all joy and remorse throughout’..

  4. Candy says:

    Glad you have forged a path (or poem) for us to follw. I’ve always found this form difficult. This beautifuly deep poem of yours inspires. I love your repeating phrase.

  5. Singledust says:

    the falling leaves can represent a lot of things to me like passing of time and memorable events, I understand the repeat of the refrain from your piece here Paul. I read this out loud, very soothing.

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