pillow talk

Having hosted a dVerse prompt recently on the ghazal form I have spent some more time studying it and decided to pen another for myself. There may be a series of these as it is a form that speaks to me.

Here i make use of both the refrain (RADIF), this lone pillow, and a rhyme scheme ( QAFIYA) face, place, space etc as well as my signature in the final couplet.

I have employed a classic theme which could be interpreted as being about the memory or perhaps dream of a lover or as metaphor to describe the longing for the divine.

I hope you enjoy.


Fragrant dawn shimmers across my waking face, this lone pillow
whispers of love calling silently in your place, this lone pillow

shadow memories play t(w)o as one, merging into the light
sound and scent of you, echo silent space, this lone pillow

falling snow sang softly of your footsteps, but not this day
chasm opens and tilts my heart to face, this lone pillow

passion burned eyes all soulful and knowing, now but an ember
such is this longing veil i must embrace, this lone pillow

how can this emptiness be so filled with you, my beloved
this scribbler knows that you exist, wrapped in his tender heart

25 thoughts on “pillow talk

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:

    This ghazal has such a classical feel to it… I almost sense that you have found a form that’s for you… I feel the longing when resting on that lonely pillow… I could see this growing into something more… either as a set of ghazals or as an even longer one from that lonely pillow.

  2. rothpoetry says:

    A beautiful poem of dreams just before waking…. The longing for love …. The visions of the mind that once lost can never again be captured… The love and longing…only to find reality a pillow!

  3. annell4 says:

    Yes, a wonderful poem and form….I did write for your prompt, but when I hit save, it was lost. That is when I first knew I had a computer problem. I hope to try again, like you, I liked the form.

  4. wildchild47 says:

    there is something so hypnotic about this piece – not only because of the poetic form, but also because of the words you’ve used as your refrain and rhyme scheme. It’s easy to just lose yourself in this – to linger and reread …. and just muse …. it’s very sensual.

  5. mhmp77 says:


    this scribbler knows that you exist,
    wrapped in his tender heart

    The scribbler is so sure unto himself. How love can expect to conquer everything in its path!


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