Tonight I am hosting MTB at dVerse where we are looking at Contrapuntal poems.
one word at a time i scribble
trying to make sense of the world
it is a stream of consciousness
i open up as a valve to my self
written on the winds of no time
scattered as dust i am expanded
blown into a place of possibility
open to the tumbling of words
of creative edgy friction forms
rooting themselves in the now
Feel free to have a go at writing one yourself and linking up with us.
I love how you can read it… but most of all how you pull out the word from the now in that last line
I love how the left-hand poem has a feel of jazz to it, while the right-hand one is kind of classical, and together they are something else! I especially love:
written on the winds of no time
scattered as dust i am expanded
blown into a place of possibility’.
Thanks Kim.
Intricate and clever.
That could be a great ‘About’ section, especially the “edgy friction forms” line, cuz knowing you, you’re not just a free verse kind of guy! Hard prompt, but I had more fun with it than I thought I would.
I love the movement in this piece. The two sides work well individually, and then combine into something very clever.
I like the idea of opening up a value to oneself.
My goodness this is absolutely gorgeous!💜
You are the master of this form! Bravo!
These 2 complement each other. I see what happens to words once they leave you. I like!
A master of words!
You made this look so easy (and I can testify that it is not). Really like this new form and love your take on it.
the world is a stream of consciousness and “i” am nothing more than a\part of it … dissolving into the now ….
this is really well done – at first glance, it seems so simple, each side – but then, read each again, then combined, and combined then right, then left – and it’s a cleft on the chin, the stubble of 5 o’clock shadow and moon\day light … well done Paul. Well done indeed.
Clearly your musical background influences your writing, this is indeed, subtle counterpoint equaling fusion.
LOVED this prompt! Growing words….what an apt title. And these lines I especially loved:
“written on the winds of no time
blown into a place of possibility”
Loved all three “melody lines” of this!
Love your write and love the prompt!! Thanks for your comment on my site.
I really like how the two poems on each side seem so different, but then come together as a whole. Well, like contrapuntal music. 🙂 Very clever title, and I like how you got “scribble” in there, too. 🙂
kaykuala
blown into a place of possibility
open to the tumbling of words
of creative edgy friction forms
This is the confusing scenario faced by all creative minds before getting the stroke of brilliance setting them up into great poems. Very true Paul!
Hank