b{eat)

It’s OLN at dVerse and I’m throwing a new form ( for me) into the ring this evening – the Eintou. The poem is 7 lines long, with a syllable count of 2-4-6-8-6-4-2.

It’s origins are credited to early African American poets!

 

o{pen}

to t(h)e s(ound) of

 

the d(rum)beat of my he/art

r (hy) th (m) co (n) necting me to the

so (ur) ce of all t (hing) s that ar (e)

pu (shh) ing me to

fin(d) _ _ (p)eas

 

24 responses to “b{eat)

  1. Dude. You know I love this. You’re really good.

    I love “hound rum/room-hymn your hinge. Shhh, (fin-)deep.”

    That’s what I see anyway, along with a million other little codes. I’ll come back later for more.

  2. I struggled with reading the phonetic emphases. Ironically, my reading along silently left me lost, but reading aloud helped. I’m a super introvert, so it took a lot for me to enlist my own voice.

    Good stuff!

  3. searching for (p)eas–(p)ea(ce)–(p)ie(ce) –(pl)ea(se). Good thing this wasn’t written on a wall..lots of head scratching.

  4. I love your sound poetry, Paul! Not sure if I could write it, though, I think you have to have a certain rhythm – maybe once upon a time when I was younger…

  5. I am definitely feeling slower than usual today. Because I know people across the pond have an obsession with peas…..
    and then I understood. Head to desk. Must take a break now. 🙂

  6. You should talk to Bryan, he knows lots about whirled peas, lol. I can see most of the imagery. Leaving some up to the mind is a good thing. Who said there’s only one way to interpret it

  7. Man, I see SO MUCH in this. The letters float around and rearrange for me. Like “O Tot” and “Dr. Hymen.” “He’s so found.” “To the source of all things sitar.” “Find deep ease.”

    So many more. But it’s just like a bubbling cauldron of alphabet soup; messages keep rising up.

  8. I am reading the book “Sapiens: A Short History of Humankind”, and just finished the last part where he talks about the cultural meme of “me, me, me” and its function in capitalism etc. Part of that is the notion of “following one’s heart”, “finding our true self”, “finding our peace” and much more. It is interesting the memes that capture us.

    Also, I tried to look for the hidden code in all the extra symbols:

    A tied up dog (pen hound)
    a drunken song (rum hymn)
    someone’s influence (ur hinge)
    going silently deep (shh deep)

  9. Thank you for introducing me to this form Paul. It is completely new to me and I can hear the African back-beat throughout. A lot of fun with the rhythmic layers you have created in here ;o)

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